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Old 19-Dec-2005, 04:35
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Default Re: Trying to introduce a new idea to my essay
I think the differences between the book and the movie could be better contrasted. You start with the movie in the first sentence, but the flow of the paragraph is about the book, so it seems a bit unbalanced to me.
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