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Old 14-Oct-2003, 20:27
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Default Re: Would you correct this essay?

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There are few positive aspect about living alone.
You have to say a few positive aspects. There is a big difference between there are few and there are a few.

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You can make whatever you want in your house, for example if you like the red colour, you would paint any walls with red.
You need to say you can do whatever you want.

Try:
  • You can do whatever you want in your house. For example, if you like red you can paint the wall red.

There is nothing wrong with the red colour. We just don't usually say it like that. Also, the wall is used to mean any wall. (You could also say the walls, but that would mean something a little different.)

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A part form that you can invite your friends to your house and stay with then at any hour of the night.
If you insist on using apart from that remember that apart is one word in that phrase. The expression is any hour of the day or night. If your friends came to your house they would be staying with you. You wouldn't be staying with them.

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Your are free to arrive at any hour because nobody are control you.
When you live in your own house you can ________ _______ _____ ___ _____ ______. There is nobody to ____ ___ ___ __ __. You are __ ____.


How would you fill in the blanks?

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In my opinion the most important advantage of living on your own is that you are independent because you are not influenced or controlled in any way by other people.
That is not bad, but is there a better (and shorter) way to put that?

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