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Old 30-Jan-2006, 00:31
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Lightbulb Re: Please check my paragraph

Do you know how to give your dog a bath? If not, you are in luck, because I am going to explain how in just a few short steps. First, you should get all needed supplies ready; these include a tub, shampoo, a brush, and a hose. Next, put the dog in the tub. Third, use the hose to get the dog wet, after he is covered in water turn the hose off. Fourth, lather the dog with shampoo, taking care to avoid the eyes. Rinse the dog thoroughly. You can towel-dry the dog, or let him air dry. Finally, use a brush to groom the dog once he`s completely dry. Clean up, and you`re done. Congratulations! You have successfully given your dog a bath. Now if your really brave, try bathing your cat.

I`m not sure how "formal" you`d like this to be, but it`s at least a bit more streamlined than before. This could be re-written umpteen different ways, so maybe someone else can do better than I did.
edit:I just checked your public profile & saw that you put English as your native language. It`s mine too, but there is still alot that can be learned from the mods & teachers on here, even if you are a native speaker. They`re good!

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