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Old 01-Mar-2006, 14:48
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Default Re: Need help with my sister's piece of writing

Flash, here are some thoughts and suggestions:
Economics which I have chosen to be closely connected with my future profession is - Economics, which I is closely connected with my chosen future profession, is
really valuable- don't use 'really' in formal writing- very
day-to-day life of everyone too- delete 'of everyone'- it seems unnecessary to me
have market economy- a
when many economists still think that it is only on its way to it- though many economists think ..way towards this
from those of ours- from ours
useful experience- a
in developed countries- dodgy phrase to me- I wouldn't think of Russia as a developing country, which this implies- maybe western???
That’s - no contractions
EuropeanBusinessSchoolLondon- spaces??/
it has definitely been not an easy way for English nation to pass- sounds translated- this has not been a smooth path for the British (also, shouldn't we talk about Britain rather than England?)
And passing it is due not only to the English government but also to outstanding English economists- Coming through these is not only down to ...
and particularly in London- commas
in a way they are teached - ...the way..taught
is so worthful in my opinion- worthwhile??
put really big contribution - made a great contribution
So I think that English professors thus - delete either 'so' or 'thus'
in a right and understandable way- in a clear way
it in Russian practice- in a Russian context/in Russia
big practical experience- great
rather an International than an English one- the student body is very international
a Financial Capital- the
of meeting- to meet
study economics at - in
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