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Old 05-Apr-2006, 07:44
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in 2001 after which, I had worked- in 2001, after which I worked
engineering industry- the
pursuing for master education- pursuing a Master's degree
survival, therefore- survival. Therefore, (or ; therefore,)
Further- furthermore,
within industry- the
job assignments it will-job assignments, which will
graduates and hence- graduates, hence
and it has its- and has its
Management coupled- Management, coupled
This taught me- has
locations, it gives- locations, which gives (repeat mistake)
responsibilities, it will (again) If you like, you could use a semi-colon
In the end I will say - To end, I can say
about my working culture- the
you'll - you will
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