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Old 26-Apr-2006, 04:14
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Default Re: Please correct my homework

Another:
First, the country was completely paralysed during a few days.

I'm not a fan of such short paragraphs. I would recommend trying to incorporate it into the next, or developing it a bit. Given that a paragraph is supposed to make a complete point, such short ones look underdeveloped.
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