Are these grammatically correct

[Zoe2008]

We sent both LC amendments to bank yesterday. However, it cannot amend the beneficiary name and requests cancel the current LC and reissue a new. We will process it to you today and expected you will receive a new LC next week.

Please note that the air freight USD260.00 is valid until end of Oct. The new rate for Nov is USD300.00 as the fuel increased. Furthermore, due to tight air space, the goods need to wait 5-6 days to be aired. So that, we will hold your responsibly for any late penalty from our customer.

[Soup]

We sent both LC amendments to the bank yesterday. The bank, however, cannot amend the beneficiary's name and requests canceling the current LC and reissuing a new one. We will process it for you today and we expect that you will receive it next week.

Please note that the air freight USD260.00 is valid until the end of October. The new rate for Nov is USD300.00 as the fuel rate has increased. Furthermore, due to limited air space, the goods will be on held for 5-6 days before being shipped. So that, we will hold your responsibly for any late penalty from our customer.

What does the portion in red mean?

[Zoe2008]

Thanks Soup

What does the portion in red mean?

I mean : We shall reserve the right to claim on your side if there will be any customer penalty.

Is better for this sentences? Please comment. Thanks again

Regards
Zoe

[albertino]

Thanks Soup

What does the portion in red mean?

I mean : We shall reserve the right to claim (against you) on your side if any customer penalty ensues.

Is better for this sentences? Please comment. Thanks again

Regards
Zoe

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