Forum newsfeeds
Forum Newsfeeds


Sites for Teachers

Sites for Teachers


Go Back   UsingEnglish.com ESL Forum > Learning English > Ask a Teacher

Notices

Reply
 
LinkBack Thread Tools Display Modes
  #1 (permalink)  
Old 05-Mar-2005, 16:02
Newbie
 
Join Date: Mar 2005
Country: USA
Posts: 2
First Language: English
Thanks: 0
Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts
Mic062 is on a distinguished road
Default Improving dense sentence structure

Hi,
I am glad to have discovered this resource and hope I am posting to the correct forum. I would like help on how to improve a dense sentence structure. Here is some sample text from an job interview feedback form:

"He may do well in an IT staff position that requires little change in routine, but at his current level of development, not in a consulting role such as an Analyst."

Is this a good structure or could it be improved?

Thanks,
Mic
Reply With Quote
Sponsored Links
  #2 (permalink)  
Old 06-Mar-2005, 02:36
Casiopea's Avatar
VIP Member
 
Join Date: Sep 2003
Country: Canada
Posts: 12,997
Current Location: China
First Language: English
Thanks: 0
Thanked 16 Times in 16 Posts
Casiopea is on a distinguished road
Default Re: Improving tense sentence structure

Quote:
"He may do well in an IT staff position that requires little change in routine, but at his current level of development, not in a consulting role such as an Analyst."
Welcome, Mic.

What about?

"He may do well in an IT staff position that requires little change in routine, but not in a consulting role such as an Analyst given his current level of development."
Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks

Tags
improving, dense, sentence, structure

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are On
Pingbacks are On
Refbacks are On

Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
sentence structure question Unregistered Ask a Teacher 6 17-Jan-2008 08:53
Question about sentence structure Unregistered Ask a Teacher 1 05-Mar-2005 13:01
Sentence structure Anonymous Ask a Teacher 2 10-Jun-2004 05:22
sentence structure Joe Ask a Teacher 4 02-Jun-2004 15:10
a sentence structure Joe Ask a Teacher 2 03-Apr-2004 15:17


New To Site? Need Help?

All times are GMT. The time now is 20:59.


vBulletin, Copyright ©2000 - 2008, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Search Engine Optimization by vBSEO 3.2.0 RC5
Copyright © 2002 - 2008 UsingEnglish.com