Improving dense sentence structure

[Mic062]

Hi,
I am glad to have discovered this resource and hope I am posting to the correct forum. I would like help on how to improve a dense sentence structure. Here is some sample text from an job interview feedback form:

"He may do well in an IT staff position that requires little change in routine, but at his current level of development, not in a consulting role such as an Analyst."

Is this a good structure or could it be improved?

Thanks,
Mic

[Casiopea]

"He may do well in an IT staff position that requires little change in routine, but at his current level of development, not in a consulting role such as an Analyst."

Welcome, Mic.

What about?

"He may do well in an IT staff position that requires little change in routine, but not in a consulting role such as an Analyst given his current level of development."