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Old 14-Mar-2005, 07:54
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hello SIR i m AMJED KHAN.i m from PAKISTAN.recntly im making my preparationfor CSS competetiv exams.ineed your suggestions fo englis essay.iprepare a essay .please help me in this respect and give me suggestions for improvement about this essay .and point out my lapses.i will be very thank full for your kind help. first part of my essay is as under.please ignor the spelling error
POVERTY
POVERTY IS A CRIME IN THE WORLD OF TODAY .IT SUCH A CRIME THAT IS BEING COMMITTED BY THE WORLD NATIONS IN GENERAL AND POOR STATES IN PARTICULAR.AND THE WORST COUNTRY TO BE POOR IS PAKISTAN .A LARGE NUMBER OF PEOPLE HAVE TO SLEEP UNDER BRIDGES TO BEG IN THE STREET AND EVEN TO STEEL BREAD.THEY ARE BEING FRUSTRATED IN AS MANY WAYS AS POSSIBLE DUE TO VERY ATTACK OF THE VIRUS OF POVERTY.GEORGE BARNARD HAD OPINED,VERY FEW PEOPLE CAN AFFORD TO BE POOR .HE WAS QUITE RIGTH IN SAYING SO.FISHER AMES HAD REMARKED,THE LEADER OF THE FRENCH REVOLUTION EXCITED THE POOR AGAINST RICH THIS MADE THE RICH POOR BUT IT NEVER MADE THE POOR RICH.THIS MAY BE APPLIED TO THE FORMER SOVIET UNION.WHERE THE SIMILAR SCENARIO COULD BE SEEN.BOTH CAPITALISM AND SOCIALISM HAVE FAILED TO ERADICATE THE POVERTY FROM THE WORLD.THE SLOGAN OF DEMOCRACY AND THAT OF FOOD CLOTHIN AND SHELTER WERE RAISED FROM THE VARIOUS PART FROM THE WORLD BUT THEY PROVED MERELY AS EMPTY WORDS.
POVERTY IS A COMPLICATED PHENOMENON REFLECTING ITSEKF IN EVERY WALK OF OUR LIFE.IT HAS COME TO STAY PERMANENTLY AND IS VISIBLE IN ALMOST ALL FACETOF OUR URBAN AS WELL AS RURAL ENVIRONMENT SUCH AS SOCIAL TRANSACTION,ECONOMIC RELATION ,POLITICAL PATTERNSAND SO ON.DEVELOPING COUNTRIES ARE TRAPPED IN THEIR OWN POVERTY AND PAKOISTAN HAS NO EXCEPTION TO IT .OUR COUNTRY LIKE OTHER DEVELOPING COUNTRIES ARAE TRAPPED IN THE VICIOUS CIRCLE OF POVERTY WHICH TENDS TO REPEAT AND AGGRAVATE UNLESS SOME VIGOROUS EFFORTS ARE MADE TO BREAK OUT OF THIS CIRCLE OF POVERTY.RANGAR NARASKE DESCRIBE THIS CIRCLE AS THE BASIC CAUSE OF UNDER DEVELOPMENT OF POOR STATES.ACORRDING TO HIM THESE COUNTRIES ARE POOR DUE TO DOMESTIC OBSTACLE .THESE OBSTACLE ACT AND REACT UPON ONE ANOTHER IN SUCH AWAY THAT THEY FORM A VICIOUS CIRCLE.THEY KEEP THE COUNTRY IN A PREPETUAL LOW LEVEL OF DEVELOPMENT.FOR EXAMPLE IN PAKISTAN PEOPLE HAVE LOW PER CAPITA INCOME .DUE TO LOW INCOME THEY HAVE LITTLE ABILITY OR INCENTIVE TO SAVE.WHEN THE THE FLOW OF INCOME SLOW IN IT THE INVESTMENT IS BOND TO BE LOW .LOW INVESTMENT LEADS TO LOW PRODUCTIVITY .WITH LOW PRODUCTIVITY THE INCOME IS BOUND TO BE LOW.PEOPLE AS SUCH REMAIN POOR.THE VICIOUS CIRCLE IS COMPLETED.
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Old 14-Mar-2005, 07:57
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My first point is to ask you to change the case. I will not read it in upper case because it is difficult on the eye.
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