Re: revising of a few sentences 3
Your posts are always VERY long.
If you were to post between 4 and 6 sentences per post, people might have more energy to review them. I just look at how long they are and sigh.
I went down as far as "tentative" and the only comment I have is that the "scores" one is in a style used by headlines; as long as that was your intent, all looked okay up to that point.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.