Urgent: Motivation letter correction required
I feel it a unique privilegeto give a brief account of myself to your esteemed institution. I was born in 1986 in Tehran. During my childhood Frequently; I heard from my parents that my natural ability was brilliant since my childhood that distinguished me from others. My interest in engineering specifically electrical engineering dates back to my childhood. As a child, when playing with electric toys I always wondered how they worked and I sometimes took them apart to see what’s within and the only component of them familiar to me was their dc machines! All other parts were always a mystery to me. Times pass day by day and I progress in my life, I always was first-rank-student during my primary school, guidance school and high school and pre-university school. In a short time I did my school-works and I spent the rest time to my hobbies, creating electrical devices. I used digital kits to implement electric devices, varies from alarm clock to small FM-Radio. I was very interested in Biomedical engineering from the very beginning of my high school studies and this love was so much that I even had dreams about being admitted to this field as a university student at that time, in my sleep! The motivation to be admitted was so strong in my mind that it could keep me awake in some nights and encouraged me to study the prerequisites to be admitted in this field in the entrance exam in Iran.My best sources of inspiration were, my father and my mother who made me feel self-confident and suave in manners. I passed my secondary and higher secondary examinations with distinction and stood among the top 6% of the 7000 students who appeared for the Biomedical engineering entrance examination.
At the end I have to add that as soon as I saw my name between those passed the entrance exam and eventually were admitted, I was so glad and jumping up and down severely that I fall down and my right leg hurt so badly that I could attend in registration day with difficulties! After those days, I have been studying medical engineering between 2005-2009 Academic years with great happiness; and in all semesters I was first rank in my branch (biomedical engineering-clinical) and also I was finalist in all branches and I have got the first rank in biomedical engineering faculty, Also I can be admit without any need to participate in its entrance exam for master with scholarship. In general, I am very interested in studying & researching. Also I prefer my studies to all other life affairs in my thoughts and practically I even would rather study than be busy with leisure in some cases.
I love electronics lab as I think that no things can be interesting for me, and can make me laugh like an electron that jumps up and down in an electrical circuit and as result of this movement I can see interesting shape in output. So, for fun, I have read theories behind electronic kits, and I have designed my own circuits in Labs. In the past year, I never forget my Electronic I teacher action that highlighted my name in the grade list among 150 students because I got 23 out of 20 due to my extra work in the course projects. Most of my professors at Biomedical Engineering department of Azad University have known me as a creative and talented student.
I firmly believe that sensible curiosity and creative imagination lead to advancement of knowledge in any sphere of activity. Electronics I, II, III has fascinated me to such an extent that I started learning the basics of electronics right from my secondary school level. The urge to enhance my knowledge in Electronics & control coupled with the yearning to make a significant contribution in that field gave me the inspiration to put in the best of my efforts during my course. Concrete foundations in the sciences propelled me towards a bachelor's degree in Biomedical Engineering at the prestigious Azad Islamic university science and research. The experience in this university was unique, as it combined theory with practical experience at the engineering faculties and medical hospital and subsequently I chose to pursue MSc degree in Biomedical Engineering. I believe I have the qualities to be a good researcher and a teacher. I approach teaching as a comprehensive form of discussion and will capitalize on my former teaching stints to create learning environments where both the student and the teacher are mutually benefited. I was teaching assistant of electronics I, II and Industrial electronic and mathematical engineering and I think I was very successful in all of them as the students have been commenting. It is necessary to mention that my novitiate I, II was in hospital “Tehran heart center” where cause to do practical working with quite a few medical equipments. Moreover I have cooperated in publishing 2 books “Artificial Blood” and “Sex Determination before pregnancy” and I am the second author in both of them.
Following my Msc, I like to work in academicals environment. Also I want to be in touch with industry and I know that most of the technical universities in the Netherlands have good link with industry which one of them is Eindhoven University. Netherlands education with inputs from associated industries provides expansion of faculties of the mind. By visiting Eindhoven website, this university with variety of courses and comprehensive set of electives your course structure is very appealing. Your university is an ideal place for aspiring students like me. I always wanted to be a part of such university, which is having international reputation and provides a simulating education environment. Most of all, I feel Eindhoven university, with the experienced and excellent faculty, modern facilities and extensive libraries, will provide the right environment to develop my talents. The only certainty about technology in an ever-changing world, and how it can effects modern life, is that, changes in society will accelerate at an increase pace. Whatever marveled a few years ago is routine today, the extraordinary that we aspire for now is ordinary tomorrow and the inventions of the future will be things, which we hardly imagine today. I wish to be a small, though significant part of that future of Biomedical engineering. Ten years from now, I see myself heading an active research team engaged in work of direct industrial relevance .I thank this opportunity given to express myself and if given the chance, I shall prove worthy of every encouragement given by educating in Eindhoven university. My intention for applying to M.S. Program at Eindhoven University is due to its honorable faculty, high quality of study, and strong research facilities, where researchers combine theory with technology to deal with challenging practical problems. According to all of my advisors at SRBIAU, and some of my friends, and the excellent papers in recent years which are related to Eindhoven, I think studying at Eindhoven University Biomedical Engineering Department is well. it has always an active and competitive atmosphere for research and study.This forms the basis of my desire to pursue my M.S. Biomedical Engineering course in your country. I believe that by studying in a high-tech country like Netherland I will be able to further enhance my knowledge with opportunity of getting exposure to the latest developments taking place. Previously , in its best manner. Given the above facts, the reason that I am applying for the graduate study at Eindhoven is that I have found the Biomedical Engineering at this university with a high-level of academic and research environment. The location at which this university stands is also an ideal place for students wishing to focus their attention to education and research. in the past 3 years I have been read some papers in different titles which most of them are related to Eindhoven university ..
30 ,Nov, 2009
Re: Urgent: Motivation letter correction required
I feel it a unique privilege to give a brief account of myself to your esteemed institution. I was born in 1986 in Tehran. My interest in engineering (specifically electrical engineering) dates back to my childhood. As a child, I always wondered how electrical toys worked. Sometimes, I took them apart to see. The only component that was familiar to me was their dc parts. All other parts were a mystery to me. The remainder of my time was spent on my hobbies-creating electrical devices. I used digital kits to implement electrical devices, from alarm clock to small FM-Radio. I extremely interested in Biomedical engineering. My passion has motivated me to study the prerequisites in order to be admitted in this field in the entrance exam in Iran. I successfully passed my secondary and higher secondary examinations with distinction and stood among the top 6% of the 7000 students who appeared for the Biomedical engineering entrance examination.
This is just an example of how this could read. I deleted quite a bit of unnecessary information. They don't need to know that you dreamed of this, etc. If you need any further help, please send me an email.
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