Is this correct english

[Shara fi]

Is dit goed?
Hi,
Hello, my name is Shara. I am a 21 year old woman. I did study MBO-4 first, after this study I realized I would like to have much more knowledge than I already have. This is one of the reasons I chose to follow the HBO study. Another reason of why I wanted to follow this study, is because I like being social with people. With social I mean that I like helping people. But the main reason I am doing this study is because of the requirements for the medical science, one of the requirements is having a propodeuse.

[Raymott]

Is dit goed?
Hi,
Hello, my name is Shara. I am a 21 year old woman. I studied MBO-4 [?] first. After this study I realized I would like to have much more knowledge than I already had. This is one of the reasons I chose to follow the HBO study. Another reason of why I wanted to follow this study, is because that I like being sociable with people. With By social I mean that I like helping people. But the main reason I am doing this study is because of the requirements for the Medical Science. One of the requirements is having a propodeuse.

An English-speaking person might not know what a MBO-4, HBO or propodeuce is.
R.