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Dear patron,

At the outset, we would like to thank you for your continues support to make Dwarkadas jeweler achieve its peaks of success

It gives us immense pleasure to announce that Dwarkadas Chandumal Jewellers is participating at the India International Jewellery Show (IIJS), India’s biggest jewellery show. We are Pleased to invite you to a rare show of our new range of Jewellery that we would be launching at the event with an exclusive fashion show - an exclusive preview for our loyal patron, that’s you.



As we have limited number of seats. Hence, we request you to confirm your participation at earliest, so we can book a seat for you.

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Originally Posted by new2grammar

Dear pPatron,

At the outset, we would like to thank you for your continues continuous support to make Dwarkadas jeweler achieve its peaks of success.

It gives us immense pleasure to announce that Dwarkadas Chandumal Jewellers is participating at the India (India or Indian - double check) International Jewellery Show (IIJS), India’s biggest jewellery show. We are Ppleased to invite you to a rare show of our new range of Jewellery that we would will be launching at the event with an exclusive fashion show - an exclusive preview for our loyal pPatron, that’s you.



As we have limited number of seats. Hence, we request you to confirm your participation at the earliest, so we can book a seat for you.

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===Not a teacher===

I have two comments to add:

'At the outset' is not appropriate, 'first of all' is preferred.

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Dwarkadas Chandumal Jewellers is participating at the India International Jewellery Show.

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You participate 'in an event' not 'at an event'.


not a teacher