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[f.alawadhi]

Hello. I have written this letter to the university. I hope that you could give me your opinion about it and correct it if neccessary.

Dear Committee,
I would like to inform you that I am aware that my daughter ***** ***** ********* had left study in Zayed University in the fall of 2009 and she is willing to commence it again in the fall of 2010, and I will be responsible of the payment of her tuitions and any other expenses.
I hope that she will be accepted and enrolled in the coming academic year.

Thank you

Yours, ***** ********

[emsr2d2]

Hello. I have written this letter to the university. I hope that you could give me your opinion about it and correct it if neccessary.

Dear Committee,
I would like to inform you that I am aware that my daughter ***** ***** ********* had left study in Zayed University in the fall of 2009 and she is willing to commence it again in the fall of 2010, and I will be responsible of the payment of her tuitions and any other expenses.
I hope that she will be accepted and enrolled in the coming academic year.

Thank you

Yours, ***** ********

Dear Committee

My daughter, [name], suspended her studies at Zayed University in the fall of 2009. However, she wishes to re-commence her studies in the fall of 2010.

I would like to inform you that I am willing to be responsible for the payment of all her tuition and any associated expenses.

I would be very grateful if she could be enrolled at the university for the coming academic year.

Yours sincerely

[f.alawadhi]

Thanks a lot.