Speech

[iloverlg]

Hi! I am in 7th grade and I'm running for Student Council Vice President.. I have most of my speech done but it has to be three minutes and mine is only 2. I need more ideas, and I need help changing sentences so they dont always start with I or I'm or I'll.
Here is part of the speech:

..I will try making passing periods five minutes instead of four and I’ll add more things to do at after hours. I’ll try organizing more raffle events too. I am good at both taking control coming up with good ideas, and listening to everyone else’s ideas. I go above and beyond in whatever task is given to me. I am very responsible and I respect other people’s opinions. I’ll always be able to step in and help when I’m needed. I’m really creative so I’ll be able to come up with good ideas. If I’m elected vice president I hope to bring a lot of new clubs and activities to the school. I will also try getting more events to raise money for school dances so we can go from all those old, ripped decorations, to new, better looking ones...

Please help me out!

[Rover_KE]

Hi, iloverlg, and welcome to the board.

The part of your speech that you posted sounds very good to me and there's not much I can suggest to improve it. There's bound to be a lot of Is in a speech like this, so don't worry about that.

Speak slowly and clearly, leaving a slight pause after every point to let it sink in. Look at your audience more than at your notes, and engage individuals in eye contact to get them on your side.

Three minutes seems to be a very long time to have to fill for a speech like this. Are you sure you're not limited to a maximum of three minutes? I wouldn't worry about this, either. It's not the length of a speech that matters but the content. Say what you have to say confidently and without mumbling and then sit down.

Good luck.

Rover

[Gillnetter]

Hi! I am in 7th grade and I'm running for Student Council Vice President.. I have most of my speech done but it has to be three minutes and mine is only 2. I need more ideas, and I need help changing sentences so they dont always start with I or I'm or I'll.
Here is part of the speech:

Thank you for allowing me this time to speak to you about the upcoming election for Student Council. I have thought about this office, the responsibilities, and the opportunities I will, as your new vice president, have. Changes are needed. Not small changes, but changes that require both creative thought and the ability to make them come true. As your new Vice President I will push hard to make making passing periods five minutes instead of four. This small change will make it easier for everyone concerned, both students and faculty. We all recognize that there is a real need for more activities after school hours. Here, I will work with the faculty and the office to organize more creative options for us. Once elected to this office I will be asking for ideas from you. Feel free to contact me when you come up with ideas. Another thing that should be tried are more raffle events. This have been successful in the past and should be enlarged now. I am good at taking charge, coming up with good ideas, and listening to other's ideas. It is the reponsibility of a leader to to do these things and you will not be disappointed with me when it comes to these items. We need a vice president who is willing to go above what is normal and required - that's a good picture of me. In addition, I am very responsible and, most importantly, I respect the opinions of others. I’ll always be able to step in and help when I’m needed. This office needs a creative person, a person who can be counted on. When I’m elected vice president I hope to bring a lot of new clubs and activities to the school. I will also be a force in getting more events to raise money for school dances so we can go from all those old, ripped decorations, to new, better looking ones...

Please help me out!

Here are a few ideas that you can expand on.