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Paragraph correction
Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.
Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?
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Re: Paragraph correction

Originally Posted by
daemon99
Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.
Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?
Not a teacher.
Since I have lived in VN all my life, I myself wish to obtain that " natural way" in writing as well as in speaking English, but I will try to give a hand in the meantime ..
NOWADAYS,...FACING ANOTHER. I DON'T LIKE...THAT'S IN THE DIRECTION OPPOSITE THE MOVEMENT..."
I THINK YOURS IS VERY GOOD TO ME THOUGH.
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Re: Paragraph correction

Originally Posted by
daemon99
Now-a-days, the seating arrangement in some of the buses is made similar to that of trains. Each pair of seats is arranged facing another pair. I don't like to sit in a seat that's in the opposite direction of the movement of bus. I feel dizzy.
Can someone please tell me if the above paragraph sounds natural?
NOT A TEACHER
(1) You have written a very nice paragraph.
(2) I suggest only a few little changes:
Nowadays [it has become one word] [probably no comma is
needed] the seating arrangement on [I prefer it to "in"] some
buses is similar to that on trains: Each pair of seats faces the other pair.
[I used a colon to introduce the explanation. You used a period and a
new sentence. That's fine, too. I think that a colon is more "dramatic"
and "tighter" writing. But that is only a personal choice.] I do not like to
ride backwards, [you may omit the comma, but I personally would include
it to prevent any misunderstanding] because it makes me dizzy.
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Re: Paragraph correction
Thanks a lot, Parser!
I do not like to ride backwards...
But if I had to use the word direction, how should I put it?
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Re: Paragraph correction

Originally Posted by
daemon99
Thanks a lot, Parser!
But if I had to use the word direction, how should I put it?
NOT A TEACHER
(1) I do not know.
(2) Maybe (maybe!!!):
I do not like sitting/to sit in a seat facing the opposite direction.
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