sentences

[contiluo]

Are the following sentences acceptable?

(1) On the other hand, Tony, wearing his sunglasses, enjoying the sunbath, lying down on the blanket, unknowingly fell asleep.
(2) While he was sleeping, the sun was getting burning hot.
(3) After he had an imaginaary dream, he was awoke by the heat.
(4) Owing to the scorching sun, he got sunburned from head to heel.

[lauralie2]

No. They are unacceptable.

[contiluo]

Are the following rewritten sentences acceptable?

#1 On the other hand, Tony, wearing his sunglasses, lying down on the blanket, and enjoying the sunbathing, unknowingly fell asleep.

#2 While he was sleeping at the sunny beach, the sun was heating up.

#3 About two hours later, he was awoke by the glow.

#4 He got sunburned caused by the scorching sun.

[lauralie2]

Are the following rewritten sentences acceptable?

#1 On the other hand, Tony, wearing his sunglasses, lying down on the blanket, and enjoying the sunbathing, unknowingly fell asleep.

#2 While he was sleeping at the sunny beach, the sun was heating up.

#3 About two hours later, he was awoke by the glow.

#4 He got sunburned caused by the scorching sun.

Good try, but they too are unacceptable.

[contiluo]

I tried to rewrite these sentences as following. Are they acceptable?

#1 Tony, wearing his sunglasses, lying down on the blanket, and enjoying the sunbath, unknowingly fell asleep.
#2 While he was sleeping on the sunny beach, the sun became hot.
#3 About two hours later, he was awakened by the bright sun.
#4 Because of the scorching sun, he was sunburned from head to toe.

Please help me correct the four sentneces in a natural way. Thanks!