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[Ildus1988]

My name is XXX, I obtained my bachelor’s degree in XXX, Russia in Standardization and Certification (oil chemistry) and now working on my Master’s degree in Colorado State University (USA) in Environmental Engineering. I’m interested in undergoing summer internship in XXX and becoming of it’s employee after my graduation (2012).

Is it sounds weird? How native speaker would say?

[Barb_D]

My name is XXX, I obtained my bachelor’s degree in XXX, Russia in Standardization and Certification (oil chemistry) and now working on my Master’s degree in Colorado State University (USA) in Environmental Engineering. I’m interested in undergoing summer internship in XXX and becoming of it’s employee after my graduation (2012).

Is it sounds weird? How native speaker would say?

Start with your highest degree, even if it's in progress.

Dear [get the name of the person recruiting, and don't say "to whom it may concern"],

I am currently pursuing my master's degree in Environmental Engineering at Colorado State University. {IF this is going to US-based employers, no need to specify USA.}. My undergraduate degree is in Standardization and Certification (oil chemistry), from [name of university] in Russia.

I am looking for a summer internship in the, with the ultimate goal of full-time employment upon my graduation in 2012.

My work experience includes... [or my fields of research have included...]