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[dilodi83]

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...such as in the story of the two brothers Hewald who were killed by the Pagans and, after their deaths, a brilliant light shined in the sky in the place where their bodies passed.

[Raymott]

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...such as in the story of the two brothers Hewald who were killed by the Pagans and, after their deaths, a brilliant light shined in the sky in the place where their bodies passed.

It's not a sentence.
As a series of clauses, this would be better:
...such as in the story of the two brothers Hewald who were killed by the Pagans, in which, after their deaths, a brilliant light shined in the sky in the place where their bodies passed.
'Who' refers to brothers, and 'in which' refers to 'story'.

[5jj]

a brilliant light shined in the sky

A light shone in the sky.
I shined my shoes.