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Old 21-Aug-2005, 14:13
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Default Too many pronouns in this sentence?

Is there a way of condensing this (formal) sentence so we can get rid of at least one of the you/your pronouns? (taken from a job refusal):

"We will return your application to you upon your request".

It seems that with the sentence being so short that the meaning is altered when removing one of the pronounds.
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Default Re: Too many pronouns in this sentence?

The phrase "to you" is redundant. That's what return means.
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Old 21-Aug-2005, 16:27
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Default Re: Too many pronouns in this sentence?

But of course! (Unless your application was forwarded to them from another department, etc., in which case the recipient would still understand what was going on).

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