is this good English

[snade17]

Hi dear experts! Could you please tell if the following sounds OK in English:

Abstract: The flat foot is the most common foot deformation that results in a number of health problems. This study establishes the condition of the arch of the foot in adolescents as well as the influence of some risk factors for its deformation. More than a 1/4 of the examined students have been found to have a fallen foot arch and flat foot. Whereas these phenomena are more frequently met among boys than girls, they are equally met in both sexes who are overweight, which makes it the primary risk factor for this health problem.

[Karima-19]

Hi dear experts! Could you please tell if the following sounds OK in English:

Abstract: The flat foot is the most common foot deformation that results in a number of health problems. This study establishes the condition of the arch of the foot in adolescents as well as the influence of some risk factors for its deformation. More than a 1/4 of the examined students have been found to have a fallen foot arch and flat foot. Whereas these phenomena are more frequently met among boys than girls, they are equally met in both sexes who are overweight, which makes it the primary risk factor for this health problem.

Not a teacher!

Hello Snade! Well, I found your English good, in addition to that, comprehensible.

Good luck

[freezeframe]

Hi dear experts! Could you please tell if the following sounds OK in English:

Abstract: The flat foot is the most common foot deformation that results in a number of health problems. This study establishes (What are you trying to say with this word?) the condition (What are you trying to say here?) of the arch of the foot arch in adolescents as well as the influence of some risk factors for in its deformation. More than a 1/4 of the examined students have been found to have a fallen foot arch and flat foot. Whereas these phenomena are more frequently met found among boys than girls, they are found/distributed equally met in across both sexes among the overweight. which makes it This makes excess weight the primary risk factor for this health problem.

You close with calling flat foot a "health problem" but your first sentence establishes flat foot as a cause of health problems. This is inconsistent. I suggest rephrasing.

[snade17]

Thank you very much. You were most helpful!

[Rover_KE]

Abstract: Flat foot is the most common foot deformation and can result in a number of health problems. This study establishes the condition of the arch of the foot in adolescents as well as the influence of some risk factors for its deformation. More than a quarter of the examined students have been found to have a fallen foot arch and flat foot. Whereas these phenomena are more frequently met among boys than girls, they are equally met in both sexes who are overweight, which makes it the primary risk factor for this health problem.

Rover