poem

[masih.ostad]

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I have no say nor wit to say
In this day I have only prey to say
Hey, Lord, I bid you. Listen to me!
I have much ado and more to say.

World is a strange place to live in
Some doesn’t have food and die herein
Some has less of it and also die herein
Others has plenty of it but also die herein

Wherein did I hurt your feelings? Can I undo?
Didn’t I sell my soul to buy more love for you?
Didn’t I apportion my heart to you?
Didn’t I tortured my mind to reach you?

Thanks

[Gillnetter]

Would you like to give me feedback on this?

I have no say nor wit to say
In this day I have only prey to say (prey is something hunted as a deer is prey for a lion. Did you mean "pray"?)
Hey, Lord, I bid you. Listen to me!
I have much ado and more to say.

World is a strange place to live in (This world or the world)
Some doesn’t (don't) have food and die herein (herein refers to a place. I would read better it you dropped "herein" in all of these lines.)
Some has less of it and also die herein
Others has plenty of it but also die herein

Wherein did I hurt your feelings? Can I undo?
Didn’t I sell my soul to buy more love for you?
Didn’t I apportion my heart to you?
Didn’t I tortured (torture) my mind to reach you?

Thanks

Gil