paraphrasing of one sentence

[vil]

Dear teachers,

Would you be kind enough to give me your considered opinion concerning the paraphrasing of one sentence from an American short story?

The boy catches Bill neatly in the eye with a piece of brick.

The kid throws a stone and hits Bill right in the head.

V.

[Gillnetter]

Dear teachers,

Would you be kind enoughto give me your considered opinion concerning the paraphrasing of one sentence from an American short story?

The boy catches Bill neatly in the eye with a piece of brick.

The kid throws a stone and hits Bill right in the head.
"kid" could refer to either a boy or a girl - the original specified a male.
A "brick" is man made, a stone is natural
Bill was hit in the eye in the original, not in the head. Though the eye is in the head, the eye is more specific.
V.

Gil