High officials

[namloan]

- I think people who rob and kill jewelry stores' owners and high offcials who receive money of bribe from criminal gangs should receive life imprisonment sentence or capital punishment.

Does this sentence sound natural in daily conversations?

Thank you so much

[J&K Tutoring]

namloan-

"Does this sentence sound natural in daily conversations?"

Assuming this really is the question you want to ask, then yes, this does sound 'natural'- according to Nature- something one might naturally hear. Sounds a little crazy to me, but no crazier than some other things I've overheard people say.

Most things people say are not perfectly correct grammatically, but that's just Human Nature...

[TheParser]

- I think people who rob and kill jewelry stores' owners and high offcials who receive money of bribe from criminal gangs should receive life imprisonment sentence.

Does this sentence sound natural in daily conversations?

Thank you so much

***** NOT A TEACHER *****


(1) I think that you should be congratulated on writing such a good paragraph.

Your English is very good. (I am pretty sure that many native speakers here in

the United States would not know how to write jewelry stores' owners.)

(2) I know, however, you want a frank (very honest) opinion. So I feel that a

reader would know that the paragraph was not written by a native speaker.

(3) Of course, I am not a great writer myself. Nevertheless, I feel that your

paragraph would sound more "natural" if a few changes were made.

(4) Maybe something like this:

I think that life imprisonment should be given to people who rob and

kill jewelry store owners, and to high-ranking officials who accept bribes

from criminal gangs.