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    Franc Amour is offline Newbie
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    Default Can't make this sentence work

    Greetings from a UE newbie!

    Someone asked me to review their work prior to publishing online. Maybe it's a "case of the Mondays," but for the first time in a long time, I'm actually struggling to make this sentence come out right...

    ourcompany.com or any of our employees or affiliates do not sell the products John Doe reviews or receive any compensation from manufacturers for reviewing them.

    How can this be reworded so that it is much less clumsy and more accurately conveys the message?

    Thank you VERY much!

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    Default Re: Can't make this sentence work

    Quote Originally Posted by Franc Amour View Post
    Greetings from a UE newbie!

    Someone asked me to review their work prior to publishing online. Maybe it's a "case of the Mondays," but for the first time in a long time, I'm actually struggling to make this sentence come out right...

    ourcompany.com or any of our employees or affiliates do not sell the products John Doe reviews or receive any compensation from manufacturers for reviewing them.

    How can this be reworded so that it is much less clumsy and more accurately conveys the message?

    Thank you VERY much!
    I would word a disclaimer this way -

    Neither ourcompany.com, its employees, or affiliates, sell the products that John Doe reviews; nor does ourcompany.com, its employees, or affiliates, receive any compensation from the various companies that manufacture the reviewed products.

    Or

    Neither ourcompany.com, its employees, or affiliates, sell the products that John Doe reviews; nor does ourcompany.com, its employees, or affiliates, receive compensation in any form, from the various companies that manufacture the reviewed products.
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    Default Re: Can't make this sentence work

    Thanks... yes, that makes much more sense and rolls out much easier!

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