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In many countries, children are engaged in some king of work. Some people regard this is completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsability.



What are your opinion on this?





Nowadays, in many countries some children have been working in some kind of jobs.Some people believe that children should work on condition that they get fulfilling experience, taking responsibilities. However, others argue that this is totally unacceptable. I totally disagree with those people who would say that it is a good opportunity for children to work in any kind of paid work.

Firstly, there is no doubt that working on any kind of job may give you responsibility and experience. However, this could negatively affect children’s learning on the grounds that children may prefer to work than study. For example, if children receive income from their work, they are more likely to drop out of school early or take their education lightly. Thus, they must not work under any circumstance and leave this responsibility for their parents.

Secondly, children should spend their time studying and playing in their spare time rather than working. In addition, there are plenty ways to teach children how to be responsible without working, such as establish punishments when children do not do their homework or they have bad behavior. It is remarkable that these punishments must not be based on physical or physiological aggression so as not to affect the growth of youth. To set an example, a punishment could be that you do not allow them to watch TV unless they do the homework.

In conclusion, although children could take responsibility, working in some kind of paid work, this could impact on their growth. Thus, it is essential that kids spend their time just studying and playing, leaving the work for their parents.