What is the correct way to write this?

[michellerae]

Also, it is more likely for a place to hire someone if they know that person is coming from a school and he or she has already had a good word put in for them.

OR

Also, it is more likely for a place to hire someone if they know that person is coming from a school and a good word has already been put in for he or she?

Or is there some other/better way to write this? HELP PLEASE!! Thank you!

[emsr2d2]

Also, it is more likely for a place to hire someone if they know that person is coming from a school and he or she has already had a good word put in for them.

OR

Also, it is more likely for a place to hire someone if they know that person is coming from a school and a good word has already been put in for he or she?

Or is there some other/better way to write this? HELP PLEASE!! Thank you!

I don't like "a place". Do you mean a company? I also don't know what you mean by "coming from a school". Do you mean that they attended a particular school or college?

A company is more likely to hire someone who attended a highly-respected school, and if the school puts in a good word for them.