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They reserve their sensibility not only for themselves but for others, they are compassionate without being condescending; their courage, far from being bravado, is the power that endures; and they take jokes in stride.
Hi,
I want to know how the sentence above which I wrote sounds to natives in terms of its grammatical structure and semantics and would greatly appreciate any insights or tips to make it sound more natural.
Thanks
The overall grammar seems okay, but I'm not sure what you want to say. I can help you reword it, but I need to understand your intentions better.Quote:
Originally Posted by rainous
They reserve their sensibility not only for themselves but for others, -- I don't know what you mean by this part at all. Forget about this one. I quoted this from an author, and I don't even know what exactly he means by that. It sounds something like being sensitive and artistic in terms of one's thoughts or behaviors not only with regard to oneself but when treating others as well. Does it make sense to you?
they are compassionate without being condescending; -- this one is good Thanks
their courage, far from being bravado, is the power that endures; -- I'm not sure how "courage" is an "ensuring power" but the grammar is okay I tried to mean their courage is what's helping them to endure and sustain whatever difficulties they might be facing, rather than serving as mere bravado. Maybe I could use your help in rewording it if it sounds awkward.
and they take jokes in stride. -- I'm not sure what you mean. Do you mean that they are self-effacing? They have a good sense of humor? They don't take themselves too seriously? Something else? I tried to mean somewhere along the lines of, as one of their noble attributes, they have large enough hearts to play along with jokes, even with ill-intended jokes, that are directed at them without being bitter about them.
Thanks for you help^^
"and they take jokes in their stride."
Adding the word "their" in the sentence seemed like a very subtle and exquisite choice.Quote:
Originally Posted by bhaisahab
Would you mind elaborating on how the meaning changes by adding that word?
It's neither subtle nor exquisite. It just happens that the expression is 'take things in one's (my, your, his, etc)', not 'take things in stride'.
Well, on this side of the pond, we "take things in stride."
If you change "eduring power" to "sustaining power," that part will sound better to my ear.
So if you were to give me closure, is my initial "taking jokes in stride" OK as it is; or do I still have to try rewrites?Quote:
Originally Posted by Barb_D
Is it still confusing as to what I try to mean by that phrase?
Yet another of the BrE/AmE differences that are appearing at the moment.Quote:
Originally Posted by Barb_D