Is this sentence correct and natural for native speakers ??

[duiter]

Dear all,

Is this sentence correct and natural for native speakers ?


As we know, athletes represent the nation to attend sports games. Once they win, the reputation of the country is built. Since the reputation of the country is so precious that it cannot be measured by money, athletes should be paid more as a kind of reward to celebrate their achievements.

Thanks

[iKitty]

NOT A TEACHER

As we know, athletes represent the nation to attend sports games. Once they win, the reputation of the country is built. Since the reputation of the country is so precious that it cannot be measured by money, athletes should be paid more as a kind of reward to celebrate their achievements.

In UK English, and if you are arguing that athletes who win international competitions should be paid more, I would write this as follows:

As we know, athletes represent the nation at sports events. If they win, they enhance the reputation of the nation. As this reputation is more precious than money, athletes should be paid more as a reward for their achievements.

It could also be written with a slightly different structure:

As we know, athletes represent the nation at sports events. If they win, they enhance the reputation of the nation; as this reputation is more precious than money, athletes should be paid more as a reward for their achievements.

If you are arguing that ALL athletes should be paid more, not just those who win international competitions, I would say:

As we know, athletes represent the nation at sports events. If they win, they enhance the reputation of the nation. As this reputation is more precious than money, athletes should be paid more as a reward for their efforts.