what do you think of my descriptive writing and what grade would you give it?english gcse

It was midday on a saturday and another bus turned slowly into the dull, dreary bus station. As it stopped to let the passengers off you
could smell the foul stench of exhaust fumes and oil consume the air around you. As you looked around, you could see people
rushing frantically everywhere, mothers with children running to catch their bus on time, girls out with their friends carrying a variety
of clothing they bought while out shopping. One boy steps off the bus carrying a large suitcase while beaming from ear to ear as he runs to meet his
parents. A boy awaits by the bus stations' entrance with his younger brother, in exhaustion he leans over to sit on the cold withered bench that has aged rapidly as it has been a rest place for many. The older boy is tall, slender and has long
ginger hair and is wearing baggy jeans and has on a pair of dazzling pink shoes with luminous blue laces. The younger brother was about half as
tall as his brother and had short, spikey blonde hair and was wearing a green T-shirt with a faded Nike logo on it and was
wearing dull orange shorts with flowers on them, he was also wearing a gold chain around his neck and had on Nike boots that
were tattered and grey with a thick white strip along the side of them.

The two brothers began fighting playfully and as they did so they knocked over the boy with the suitcase. The suitcase burst
open and all of his clothes landed on the oil sodden floor of the bus station leaving them drenched in oil and ruined.

On the other side of the bus station a loud deep voice echoed over the tannoy system rasping out times



that's all i have so far but my teacher told me i need to have about one page done(front and back)so i'm aware of that thanks :)