Is my sentence correct?

[symaa]

Hello,

Could you please tell me if my following sentence is correct?



I would like to express my sincere gratitude to Mr....., who has given us free sessions on grammar and shared his valuable knowledge and precious time.

NB: The teacher is still giving lessons, that's why I've use the present perfect.

Thank you.

[Barb_D]

I personally would say that you express your appreciation instead of your gratitude.

If the classes are still going on, use "is giving" instead of "has given."

[TheParser]

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I would like to express my sincere gratitude to Mr....., who has given us free sessions on grammar and shared his valuable knowledge and precious time.

NOT A TEACHER


(1) Using the advice given to us by the moderator, I should say something like:

I would/ should like to express my appreciation to Mr. Doe for sharing his

knowledge and time by giving us free grammar lessons.

(2) If you want to say "DEEP appreciation," " VALUABLE knowledge," and

"PRECIOUS time," it is OK. But many writing teachers tell us not to use too many

adjectives. Sometimes the less said the better. Maybe your sentence would make

a stronger impression without the adjectives. In modern English, we are told that the

best sentences are short and that they let the verbs and nouns tell the story.

[symaa]

Thanks to all of you for your nice reply.

But many writing teachers tell us not to use too many

adjectives. Sometimes the less said the better

Aha, thank you sir.
I thought that using more adjectives strengthen your appreciation or gratitude.

Thank you again,

Kind regards,

[TheParser]

Thanks to all of you for your nice reply.


Aha, thank you sir.
I thought that using more adjectives strengthen your appreciation or gratitude.

Thank you again,

Kind regards,

NOT A TEACHER


(1) I apologize if I did not clearly express myself.

(2) Yes, adjectives often can strengthen a noun.

(3) I think that those writing teachers are warning us against using adjectives when

it is not necessary:

A tall skyscraper. (Of course, all skyscrapers are tall.)

A yellow daffodil. (O course, all daffodils are yellow.)

But "red dirt" is fine, for not all dirt is red.

(4) Also, some teachers warn us against trite adjectives. That is, those adjectives that are used with certain nouns so often and by so many people that they do not
mean anything any more. For example, I wish you a fond farewell.

(a) It is only my opinion, but I think that "precious time" could be considered "trite,"

for so many people use this expression that it has lost its meaning and power.

(5) Please, do use adjectives when you feel that they can add something needed to the

noun. But I should like to quote Carl Sandburg (who was a famous American writer):

Think twice before you use an adjective.

Credits:

William Strunk and E.B. White, The Elements of Style (third edition).

William Zinsser, On Writing Well (third edition).

Wilma R. Ebbitt and David R. Ebbitt, Perrin's Index to English (sixth edition).

[symaa]

NOT A TEACHER


(4) Also, some teachers warn us against trite adjectives. That is, those adjectives that are used with certain nouns so often and by so many people that they do not
mean anything any more. Besides using trite adjectives, my teacher always reminds us to avoid such expressions in our writing like ''No one can deny ...''because they are used very often by students and become, in the view of the reader, exhausted

).

Thank you so much for the detailed answer and for the references.

I really appreciate all your answers and comments!

Have a nice day,