Acceptable or not?

[Dragana.BL]

Good afternoon,

Could you please tell me if this sounds acceptable:

1. Chief Engineer for Low-Rises (I am asking this as I am not sure whether low-rise can serve both as adjective and noun?)

2. Department of War Veterans and Disabled (is “disabled” correctly used here? Do I need to say “Department of War Veterans and Persons with Disabilities”?)

3. “City assembly affairs” - does it make sense?

4. “Officer for Citizens` Petitions” referring to complaints (but not in a legal sense as in “lodge a complaint”) made by citizens about certain municipal issues (and also not as initiatives signed by many citizens for the purpose of reaching a goal)?

Thank you very much in advance!
Respectfully,
Dragana

[JohnParis]

Good afternoon,

Could you please tell me if this sounds acceptable:

1. Chief Engineer for Low-Rises (I am asking this as I am not sure whether low-rise can serve both as adjective and noun?) If Low-Rises is a noun, it sounds mildly acceptable. High-rise buildings in cities with skyscrapers have chief engineers. But, if "low rise" is an adjective, why not say "the Chief Engineer for low-rise buildings"?

2. Department of War Veterans and Disabled (is “disabled” correctly used here? Do I need to say “Department of War Veterans and Persons with Disabilities”?) Every country has its own appellation for these sort of government departments and services. I have the impression you are translating a document from the language you speak in Bosnia into English. If this is the case, just go ahead and do your best. Both options above would be acceptable and understood by anyone that speaks English.

3. “City assembly affairs” - does it make sense? Yes

4. “Officer for Citizens` Petitions” referring to complaints (but not in a legal sense as in “lodge a complaint”) made by citizens about certain municipal issues (and also not as initiatives signed by many citizens for the purpose of reaching a goal)? Officer or Office? Either way, I would say something to the effect of "George Smith, Officer for citizen petitions" or "The Office of Citizen Petitions." There is no need to apply the possessive to "citizen".

Thank you very much in advance! You're more than welcome.
Respectfully,
Dragana

John

[billmcd]

John

See John's response, but in #2, if the service is for all persons with disabilities (veterans and others), OK as is. But if only for veterans and veterans with disabilities I would simply make it Department of War Veterans.

[Dragana.BL]

Dear John and Bill,
First of all, thank you very much for your time and patience!
Yes, I am in the process of translating some administration stuff. The only thing I would like to avoid is sounding weird because some of the titles I need to translate are weird themselves! I am perfectly aware of the fact that you can`t give me the exact translation, I just need the approval of a native speaker that what they read would not make them confused! : )
I apologize if I go off topic, but I really do appreciate your help!
Thank you very much!
Respectfully,
Dragana

[JohnParis]

Hello Dragana,
You are very welcome, and it's a pleasure to help you when you ask.
Please do not hesitate to do so at any time. I have had a great deal of experience in translating (mostly medical, but some administrative) documents into English to fulfill EU requirements.
Best wishes,
John