Sarajevo

[Ashiuhto]

Please check my answers to the following grammar correction test.

Choose the one underlined word or phrase that must be changed in order for the sentence to be correct. Please check my answers as written.
1. Women have served in the American military throughout most of this century, but most in support roles: as nurses, supply workers, and transportation personnel.
2. Sarajevo, once a prosperous, tolerant city where people of many background live together in peace, is now a city torn apart by war and ethnic rivalry.
3. He has been working in this company since after graduated from college, but the promotion he has been hoping for does not come through because of a poor performance evaluation.
4. It is a shame that in our youth-oriented society too much emphasis placed on externals.
5. Based on the recommendation of school officials, some high school classes have been opened up free of charge to whoever wish to take courses in literature, art, and social studies with the normal high school population.


My answers are below.

1. Women have served in the American military throughout most of this century, but mostly in support roles: as nurses, supply workers, and transportation personnel.
2. Sarajevo, once a prosperous, tolerant city, where people of many background live together in peace, is now a city torn apart by war and ethnic rivalry.
3. He has been working in this company since after graduating from college, but the promotion he has been hoping for does not come through because of a poor performance evaluation.
4. It is a shame that in our youth-oriented society too much emphasis places on externals.
5. Based on the recommendation of school officials, some high school classes have been opened up free of charge to whoever wishes to take courses in literature, art, and social studies with the normal high school population.

[5jj]

1. Women have served in the American military throughout most of this century, but mostly in support roles: as nurses, supply workers, and transportation personnel.
2. Sarajevo, once a prosperous, tolerant city, where people of many backgrounds live together in peace, is now a city torn apart by war and ethnic rivalry.
3. He has been working in this company since after graduating from college, but the promotion he has been hoping for does not come through because of a poor performance evaluation.
4. It is a shame that in our youth-oriented society too much emphasis places on externals.
5. Based on the recommendation of school officials, some high school classes have been opened up free of charge to whoever wishes to take courses in literature, art, and social studies with the normal high school population.

[Ashiuhto]

#2 Sarajevo, once a prosperous, tolerant city, where people of many backgrounds live together in peace, is now a city torn apart by war and ethnic rivalry.

Should here be put a comma before "where"?

#4 It is a shame that in our youth-oriented society too much emphasis placed on externals.

I am confused by this sentence. Please explain to me how to correct the sentence.

[5jj]

#2 Sarajevo, once a prosperous, tolerant city, where people of many backgrounds live together in peace, is now a city torn apart by war and ethnic rivalry.

Should here be put a comma before "where"? No.
In that sentence, do people still live together in peace?

#4 It is a shame that in our youth-oriented society too much emphasis is placed on externals.

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[Ashiuhto]

#2 Sarajevo, once a prosperous, tolerant city where people of many backgrounds lived together in peace, is now a city torn apart by war and ethnic rivalry.

[5jj]