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I am writing an abstract of an essay for homework and am looking for a way to rephrase the following sentence in order to avoid the repetition of 'to'. 'to attempt to' sounds awkward.
" It is in fact exactly this absence of a harmonious ‘state of unity’ that inevitably induces the reader, and thus the critic, to attempt to grasp the inexistent innermost core of the story. "
Any help would be appreciated greatly.
Hello Northstar
"To attempt to" sounds fine to me. It isn't a blemish. Besides, in spoken English, the vowel values of the two to's would differ, as the first precedes another vowel.
MrP
I am aware of that, yet graphically there are still two instances of 'to' too close to each other. It's just for stylistic reasons, I'm kind of a perfectionist when it comes to academic writing.
Maybe:
"It is in fact exactly this absence of a harmonious ‘state of unity’ that inevitably induces the reader's (and thus the critic's) attempt to grasp the inexistent innermost core of the story."
(Are you sure you want to use "inexistent", by the way?)
MrP
hmmm, you're right, I hadn't given it any attention. I'll use non-existent instead.
I wonder too whether there's an element of tautology in "innermost core".
MrP