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Originally Posted by hookeba Please check those sentences and make them more English-like ! I am not convinced whether or not they sound OK to native speakers. |
I will try, but (as always) my answers are not necessarily the best possible :)
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Originally Posted by hookeba He and his like-minded friends ganged up against the authority and soon gained widespread notoriety. |
Without the context, I am not sure
the authority is correct. 'ganged up against authority' = they ganged up against
all authority; ganged up against the authorities = they ganged up against any or all representatives of the authorites (ie the state, the police, the government, the army...); but against
the authority suggests that they only ganged up against a particular, singular, and probably local authority - something insignificant like a Local Education Authority.
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Originally Posted by hookeba Shifts in both sides’ political ideologies turned out to be very radical and hence facilitated a smoother negotiation process. A compromise is estimated to be reached in the next talk. |
is expected is better than
is estimated. Estimates are usually calculated predictions.
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Originally Posted by hookeba There is a good deal of evidence that this company is in a phase of bonanza and its future looks promisingly lucrative. |
a phase of bonanza sounds awkward; a
bonanza phase is better.
promisingly lucrative is not good. Suggested correction: its future looks promising and lucrative
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Originally Posted by hookeba After his harsh speech delivered at the inauguration ceremony, the new president came under much criticism from the rival party. |
a lot of criticism is better than
much criticism to the native ear.
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Originally Posted by hookeba This country’s children are heavily suffering from severe malnutrition. It is suggested that this is a natural outcome of a recent bad harvest. |
Well,
suffering heavily sounds better than
heavily suffering, but I do not think 'heavily' is necessary or desirable. If they are suffering from severe malnutrition they cannot be suffering 'lightly', so the best improvement would be to lose the word altogether.