Steadfast resolve/losing faith
Hey all, I've been working on expanding a story I recently completed and submitted for publication in accord with one of my exams, however I have decided to greatly expand it to provide a much more in depth description of all my characters. I've reached my first hurdle, and I'm unsure of how to exactly get across my thought in the most appropriate English while still keeping it fluid and maintaining the comparison.
This is a simile I have thought of that may work, but would prefer a second/third opinion.
The darkness was a guarantee that would come to pass for the rest of eternity; however it is very dissimilar to my resolve. I liked to think of it as my steadfast resolve, but in fact, it would waiver faster than the beat of my heart.
I liked to think of it as my steadfast resolve, but in fact, it would waiver like a candle trying to stay alight in the wind and the darkness.
It is that particular section that I am having difficulty with.
Please feel free to drop any suggestions.
I'm not a teacher yet, but I am studying a Bachelor of Education with an English Literature major at Charles Sturt University, in NSW, Australia.