Sigh, frankly, the way Sir Ronbee express the graph is very difficult for me to imitate, especially these two sentences. I don't dare to use them in my exam because I fear I will go wrong.
No wonder some chinese students say we have different thinking ways from foreigners, and maybe we'll never be able to write a essay like one done by native speaker.
Two Sir, there are some other sentencs I'm not sure. Pls continue to suggest and correct them.
1, One of things that make me wonder is why those humanitarians do not share their sympathy with the victim, but with the criminal.
2, The government may as well consider the public’s benefits as take care of convicts’. (may as well .......as ...)
3,The issue of whether industrial skill or education contributes more to a developing country’s progress is, in my opinion, quite hard to say, because either of them can enhance the nation’s overall strength significantly.
4,Similarly the way modernization industry originated from the Industry Revolution, human civilization has been benefited from education.
5, Fashion, with the coming of modern time, occurs in today’s society, and meanwhile significantly affects people’s attitudes towards clothes, haircuts or even behaviors.
6. A nation’s success not only concerns with its industrial skills but also attributes to its educational level . (Sir, I can't use "concern" well in writing, like the usage in " human beings" or "things". For example, I'm concerned with that issue, or That issue concerns (with) me?)
7, It would be more precious if we can share our love with old memory, old things,even just occasionally.
8. Because one has to sometimes overwork or endure the failure in competition, then a woman’s natural situation seem hardly to suit such elements of being a top manager. ( here, Sir, what words can stand for people in"a higher position" Top people, Advanced manager, Administrator" )
9, While some cultures and languages are valuable for the historical meaning, it is meaningless for us to put an emphasis on the protection for them.