character

In a congratulation letter, one of sentences is:
You and Jack are such a perfect couple, and he is qualified for a good husband with his good character of responsibility, humility, integrity etc.
Is the phrase “his good character of ” wasted verbiage? 'character' is wordy, and is it better to omit the phrase and more natural?

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Originally Posted by ziawj2

In a congratulation letter, one of sentences is:
You and Jack are such a perfect couple, and he is qualified for a good husband with his good character of responsibility, humility, integrity etc.
Is the phrase “his good character of ” wasted verbiage? 'character' is wordy, and is it better to omit the phrase and more natural?

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The "he is qualified" part means that he has met the requirements to receive, or get, a good husband. Is that what you meant? If not, try this - "he is qualified as a good husband with his characteristics of responsibility, humility, integrity, etc.".

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Originally Posted by ziawj2

In a congratulation letter, one of sentences is:
You and Jack are such a perfect couple, and he is qualified for a good husband with his good character of responsibility, humility, integrity etc.
Is the phrase “his good character of ” wasted verbiage? 'character' is wordy, and is it better to omit the phrase and more natural?

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But the exercise isn't to avoid wordiness. If it was, you could simply assume that the woman already knows Jack's character (one would hope, since she's chosen to marry him).