Re: Is the writing alright?
Note: "alright" will be criticized by some who feel only "all right" is correct.
I wouldn't call it flowery, but I'd say it obtuse, almost impenetrable, and hard to read - in other words, what I consider to be typical academic writing. I'm not sure it's even grammatical toward the end with " the words my tongue can bear that shall in turn be the reason for the demise of the other I ought not to choose."
But if he's looking for you to produce bad writing, you did a great job. I think that was the point of the exercise, right?
The whole thing could be written as: Does God exist or? I'm not going to give an opinion, because no matter which answer I choose, I will end up with someone upset with me.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.