Plesae help me by checking the paragraph

[tanyasmart]

Please help me find all the errors my teacher says there is 2 errors please help me find them???



Famous people are all around us, they are on television, the news, the web, and in many other places. Almost everyone tries to become famous. They go on reality shows or try to be in the news, just to get a glimpse of fame. While people are auditioning to be on television they might act foolish just to be remembered, for example the “American Idol” show. People try out knowing that they can't sing, but they go on anyway just to be on camera. People try to be famous for the money, fame, and luxury of it all.

[Tdol]

Look at the punctuation in the first and fourth sentences.

[tanyasmart]

should the first coma in the first sentence be a semicolon

I haven't figured out the mistake in the forth sentence yet

[Tdol]

1 Yes
2- Try a comma after television and I'd put for example at the end with a comma before it.