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Old 03-Mar-2006, 14:04
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Hi Teacher,

Below is a note to be written on a thank-you card. Which of them is better, or is there any other way to express this message in a more sincere way?

VERSION 1
Thank you for being part of the triumphant launch of the XXX programme. Please accept the enclosed souvenir to mark this momentous occasion.

VERSION 2
Thank you for attending the launching ceremony of the XXX programme. Please accept the enclosed souvenir to mark this momentous occasion.

Thank you.
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Old 04-Mar-2006, 15:16
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I prefer the second- the first seems a bit excessive.
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