a specially experience

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my English it is poor, please help me check it.

Once upon a time when I was six years old, I got up early and wore my beautiful hat waited for my mother because she said she would take with me to have breakfast. I was happily gone with her. We went in the street that my mother usually walked with me to her shop. There were a lot of people went around. I hold strain my mother’s finger. There were different kinds of people sold their goods between the streets. I looked them and walked follow my mother. In that time, I crashed a man, he wore a black coat. I looked at my mother after that I felt nervous because the woman who I hold did not my mother. Immediately, I loosened my hand and looked around. I felt scared and walked hurried. I did not know how long I was looking for my mother, I wanted to cay but I tolerated. Fortunately, I met my aunt, she saw me walking alone in the street, brought me to my mother’s shop. At last, I did not remember what the other asked for me, I remember that when I saw my mother I was crying loudly.

[danch]

is there someone can help me to correct it?

[Tdol]

Once upon a time- I would just say 'When I was six...'
I got up early and wore my beautiful hat waited for my mother- this needs some punctuation and 'and' needs to be moved. Also, 'put on' would be better than 'wore' as it is an action
she would take with me - unnecessary preposition
I was happily gone with her.- this should be active- I went happily
There were a lot of people went- use -ing form
I hold strain my mother’s finger- I held my mother's hand firmly
kinds of people sold- -ing form
between the streets- wrong preposition
I looked them- preposition missing
walked follow- I'd just say 'followed'
In that time, I crashed a man- wrong time phrase and a preposition missing
man, he wore- a man wearing
who I hold did not my mother- who I was holding was
walked hurried- adverb
I did not know- present tense
I wanted to cay but I tolerated- cry?? and 'tolerated' is wrong- try 'managed not to'
I met my aunt, she- aunt; she
street, brought- street and took
At last, I did not remember- present tense, and 'at last' should probably be 'lastly'
asked for me- no preposition