Not sure how to use it properly "Some of them, while...

[Helped Wanted]

Could anyone help correct this sentence? Many thanks again for helping!

Some of them were very afraid, and some of them ran away quickly.

Is this sentence correct? Thanks very much for helping! T_T

[RonBee]

Re:

• Some of them were very afraid, and some of them ran away quickly.

It is a grammatical sentence, but it is also a rather odd sentence. It seems to be talking about two different groups of people. Perhaps:

• Some of them were very afraid, and they quickly ran away.

What do you think?

:)

[Helped Wanted]

Thanks but what if the sentence is trying to talk about two groups of people having two different reactions, how would I express it? Thanks for helping again, Ronbee! ^o^


Plus I've got another question.

Is it right to write in this way as in:

Last week, there was a robbery in Henry's Jewellery

or would it be better to keep it simple as in:

Last week, a robbery happened or took place in Henry's Jewellery.

Thanks for helping with the topic on robbery again. ^o^

[RonBee]

Thanks but what if the sentence is trying to talk about two groups of people having two different reactions, how would I express it? Thanks for helping again, Ronbee! ^o^

Perhaps:

• Some were very afraid, and others ran away quckly.

The above example doesn't make much sense, since it suggests that those who ran away were not afraid. However, that is the basic pattern. ("Some..., and others....")

Plus I've got another question.

Is it right to write in this way as in:

Last week, there was a robbery in Henry's Jewellery

or would it be better to keep it simple as in:

Last week, a robbery happened or took place in Henry's Jewellery.

Thanks for helping with the topic on robbery again. ^o^

Actually, the first one is simpler. Also, it is probably more common than the "took place" version. A typical news item might read:

• Yesterday, there was a robbery at Henry's Jewellry. Thieves made off with several thousand dollars worth of valuables.

What do you think?

[Helped Wanted]

Many thanks again, Ronbee! ^o^

[RonBee]

Many thanks again, Ronbee! ^o^

You're welcome. I look forward to seeing more of your questions.

:D