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[ben9108]

Please help me to correct my letter. I would like to send it to a company soon.

Human Resources Manager

Dear Sir/Madam

RE: APPLICATION FOR THE POST OF ENGINEER (Energy Saving)

I have pleasure in submitting my application for the post of Engineer that was recently advertised in the JobsDB.

I have worked in an engineering field for 10 years since technical institute graduation in 1994. My duties involve different kinds of specialties. These include tendering, site co-ordination & management, maintenance, renovation work, cost estimation, system design and energy saving HVAC system installation.

During the years 2000-2004, I further studied in Building Service Engineering at University of Hong Kong Polytechnics and I was awarded a Bachelor of Engineering with Honours. In my final year project, I have gained some design experience of energy saving and audit for building service system.

I enclose herewith my resume for your kind perusal. I look forward to the opportunity of attending an interview at any time that is convenient to you, so that I could explain my qualification and experience in person.

Thank you for your kindly attention.

Yours Faithfully

Ben

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Please help me to correct my letter. I would like to send it to a company soon.
Human Resources Manager
Dear Sir/Madam
RE: APPLICATION FOR THE POST OF ENGINEER (Energy Saving)
I would very much like to apply for the post of Engineer that was recently advertised in the JobsDB.
I have worked in the engineering field for the past ten years. My duties have included tendering, site co-ordination & management, maintenance, renovation work, cost estimation, system design and energy saving HVAC system installation.
I received a Bachelor of Engineering degree with honors from the University of Hong Kong Polytechnics. In my final year project, [I have gained some design experience of energy saving and audit for building service system.] (re-write)
I would be available for an interview at your convenience so that I could explain my qualifications and experience in person.
Sincerely,
Ben

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so that I could explain my qualification and experience in person.

Might sound better to say:
so that we could further discuss my qualifications and experience in person.