how do i reword this sentence?

[bbmak]

How do I rewrite this sentence to a better form? because this sentence sounds very odd.

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The little girl tells her father about her trip, minute by minute, which is good because you can picture what has actually happened to the trip in your mind.
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Can you also check this sentence too
which one should i use?
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Boys’ answers are often short and concise, but most of the times they give a lack of descriptive answer such as the previous example.

Boys’ answers are often short and concise, but most of the times they give a lack of description answer such as the previous example.

[scarlet_pimpernel]

Minute be minute, the little girl tells her father about her trip, which is good because yu can picture what actually happened in the trip in your mind.

though I am not pretty sure...^_^

Boys’ answers are often short and concise, but most of the times they give a lack of descriptive answer such as the previous example.

i think this one is correct.