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[ben9108]

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To project manager

Further to our site inspection on 2 Sept 2006, some security system have not yet been operated properly as follow
1. Vague image shown on some monitors at each Tower counter and Caretaker’s Quarter (CCTV, Visitor Panel)
2. Partial cam malfunction at each Tower counter and Caretaker’s Quarter(CCTV)
3. Partial door lock malfunction at Tower B
In view of having occupied premises, security is very important to the occupants of the premises. Therefore, we would like to seek your assistance to rectify the defect.

[Mister Micawber]

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To the Project Manager:

Further to our site inspection on 2 Sept 2006, some security systems do not yet operate properly, as follows:

1. Only a vague image is shown on some monitors at each Tower counter and the Caretaker’s quarters (CCTV, Visitor Panel).
2. There is a partial cam malfunction at each Tower counter and the Caretaker’s quarters (CCTV).
3. There is a partial door lock malfunction at Tower B.

Security is very important to the occupants of these premises. Therefore, we would like to seek your assistance in rectifying these problems.

Thank you very much for your prompt attention to this matter.