remainting iterm on/or in your order?

[bosun]

I would appreciate it if you could mark any mistakes n
1.We will send you the remaining items in your order at a later date/or time.

2. My apologies to you for the delay responding to your e-mail on a my business trip

3.The new web service is going well.


4..... as an Assistant Manager in the Strategy Purchaning Division, Cheaonan Purchanging Team, and I am mainly responsible for Analysising the cost of new commodity. I am writing the e-mail because I was introduced to you by the Sales manager in our headoffice.

[MrPedantic]

Hello Bosun

1.We will send you the remaining items in your order at a later date.
— This is fine!

2. My apologies to you for the delay responding to your e-mail on a my business trip
— Not quite; you don't need "to you", you need a preposition before "responding", and the part in bold isn't quite right (try to make a separate clause or sentence of it). If you try again, I'll check it for you!

3.The new web service is going well.
— Fine!

4..... as an Assistant Manager in the Strategy Purchaning Division, Cheaonan Purchanging Team, and I am mainly responsible for Analysising the cost of new commodity. I am writing the e-mail because I was introduced to you by the Sales manager in our headoffice.
— I've marked the parts that aren't quite right. Do you want to try again?

All the best,

MrP

[bosun]

This is my suggestion and I am not sure how to change some of the marked words.

2. My apologies for the delay in responding to your email. I was on a business trip for a couple of days.

4.... as an assistant manger in the stragegy purchase division, XX purchase team and I are responsible for estimating the cost of new items. I am writing this email because I was introduced to you.....

[MrPedantic]

Hello Bosun

2. My apologies for the delay in responding to your email. I was on a business trip for a couple of days.] Yes, that's fine. It would probably suit an informal situation, where you knew your correspondent relatively well. For a slightly more formal tone, you could say e.g. "...I have been away on business for a few days."

4.... as an assistant manager in the strategy purchase division, XX purchase team and I are responsible for estimating the cost of new items. I am writing this email because I was introduced to you...] Yes, that's almost ok. The only parts that I'm not sure about are these:

a) strategy purchase division ] I'm not sure what this would mean – what does the division do?

b) I am writing this email because I was introduced to you ] Here, did you want to express a sense of "I am writing to you following our meeting..."?

All the best,

MrP