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[hussain 1976]

My name is Hussain I am from Canada, I was born in 1976 I have three sister and one brother .I am marred and have tow kids , the first is a girl and she is three years old and the second one is a boy and he is one year old. I am self employ I have my own business I do transportation.

I want to know if this is right way to write

[curmudgeon]

Hi, Hussain, hope this helps.

My name is Hussain and I live in Canada.

I was born in 1976 and I have three sisters and one brother. I am married and have two kids , the first is a girl who is three years old and the second is a boy of one.

I am self employed with my own business in transportation.

I want to know if this is right way to write