is this okay- any valid suggestions?

[hemmin]

VDSL can be activated only after the negotiation and training are performed repeatedly bewteen the VTU-C and the VTU-R, so the parameters after port activation are a little different from those used by line profile though a set of profile data can be referenced before activation. Therefore this command is offered to query the actual parameters upon port activation.


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VDSL is activated only after the negotiation and training are performed repeatedly between the VTU-C and the VTU-R. Therefore the parameters after the port activation are different from the parameters that are used by line profile though a set of profile data can be referenced before activation. Hence, this command is used to query the actual parameters upon port activation.

[JennyAnne]

VDSL is activated only after the negotiation and training are performed repeatedly between the VTU-C and the VTU-R. Therefore the parameters after the port activation are different from the parameters that are used by line profile though a set of profile data can be referenced before activation. Hence, this command is used to query the actual parameters upon port activation.

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VDSL is activated only after repeated negotiation and training between the VTU-C and the VTU-R. After activation, the parameters change. If desired, a set of profile data can be referenced before activation. This command is used to query the actual parameters upon port activation.


I hope this helps.

[mykwyner]

Excellent posting, JennyAnne! Welcome to Using English dot com.

[JennyAnne]

Excellent posting, JennyAnne! Welcome to Using English dot com.

Thanks! I look forward to learning and helping.