proofreading

[Hanka]

Hello,

could you please proofread the following text:

The grounds for a notice given by the employer to the employee include repeated breaches of the stipulated regulations and instructions to ensure work safety in the workplace or of working procedures with which he was properly acquainted and of the breaches of which he has already been notified.

Thank you very much.

Hanka

[BobK]

Phew! 50-odd words and not a jot or a tittle. Lawyers don't like punctuation - presumably because the absence of punctuation makes more ambiguity for lawyers to profit from. This said, I don't think a re-written version would be acceptable to your bosses. If you'd like me to try though, I will - only not now, as I've got to dash.

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[Hanka]

If you would be so kind
By the way, what does "dash" mean?

Hanka

[Anglika]

Hello,

could you please proofread the following text:

The grounds for a notice given by the employer to the employee include repeated breaches of the stipulated regulations and instructions to ensure work safety in the workplace or of working procedures with which he was properly acquainted and of the breaches of which he has already been notified.

Thank you very much.

Hanka

The grounds for an employee receiving notice from the employer include repeated breaches of stipulated regulations and instructions relating to safety in the workplace or breaches of agreed working procedures. The employee may previously have been notified of such breaches.


"dash" - must rush off and do something

[BobK]

Hello,
could you please proofread the following text:
The grounds for a notice given by the employer to the employee include repeated breaches of the stipulated regulations and instructions to ensure work safety in the workplace or of working procedures with which he was properly acquainted and of the breaches of which he has already been notified.
Thank you very much.
Hanka

First, Hanka, let me apologize: when I used the phrase 'jot or tittle' I was just showing off . You'll rarely if ever meet it or use it, and I don't think it was well-chosen anyway. If you're interested, look here for some background: Tittle - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia .

I think I'd go further than Anglika in rewriting your extract, though I think her version is more likely to be acceptable in the context of disciplinary procedures.

Grounds for notice given by the employer to the employee include repeated breaches of

either

the stipulated regulations and instructions to ensure safety in the workplace

or

working procedures with which he was properly acquainted (when he has already been formally notified about breaches of them)

b

[Hanka]

Thank you BobK. Maybe one additional question. Would it be possible to use present perfect with "acquainted"? And how would it change the meaning?

Grounds for notice given by the employer to the employee include repeated breaches of either the stipulated regulations and instructions to ensure work safety in the workplace or working procedures with which he has been properly acquainted (when he has already been notified of the breaches thereof).

Thank you very much.

Hanka

[BobK]

Thank you BobK. Maybe one additional question. Would it be possible to use present perfect with "acquainted"? And how would it change the meaning?
Grounds for notice given by the employer to the employee include repeated breaches of either the stipulated regulations and instructions to ensure [work ] safety in the workplace or working procedures with which he has been properly acquainted (when he has already been notified of the breaches thereof).
Thank you very much.
Hanka

I think the present perfect is better.

b